Dear Dance
Hello!
I’m Lee Kangbok.
I’m fine thank you and…..Hey, let’s stop this $hit…
I mean after all, we aren’t this far from each other to say those boring formal greetings.
Do you remember? We were very close friends back in elementary school. Ever since I saw you from the book, I tried hard to be close friend with you. I struggled to find opportunity to meet you and finally, I found you from academy. From then, we became great friends.
However, we met again in High School. It was glad to meet you again and I decided to recover our relationship. In high school, I even got nickname called ‘BokshinMachine’ from you. Nevertheless, because the gap of three years was too long, we couldn’t be close enough.
To be honest, I really want to retrieve you. But… I am not confident that it would be possible. Sometimes, I regret my decision at middle school. I think an accidental meeting-at high school-surely have meaning that we can be closer again.
My friend, I apologize that I gave up the relationship with you and forgot about you. I really miss time when we hung around joyfully. I will try my best to restore my self-confidence towards you. Thus, would you also try hard to retrieve our friendship and hang around with me again?
Your true friend,
Lee Kangbok
An interesting topic, and it's good to learn more about your nickname. Most of the writing is solid, but there is some grammatical stuff to clean up, so do pick up a printed version in class, and if you make the changes, your grades go up.
답글삭제Regarding content, there is a lot here about a relationship, but not enough about "dance." This creative writing exercise is meant to be descriptive and experimental, and you stick heavily to a straight forward "letter" format that is evident in the 14th wave sample. Most students in the class did that as well, and it is probably my fault for not being clearer. In any case, try and test yourself a little more. This is a bit short and surface level for a poetic writing exercise.